Peer Recs: Linear Essay

Dylan: try no to ask questions in your essay. Instead write statements that are direct and answer the question and then support the answer with either facts or an anecdote or whatever. also i think there are some commas missing in the first couple of paragraphs. I think you essay is really good and i like your points that you brought up. you really changed my mind on the issue when you talked about the criminals that would be released if pot was legal. You did a really really good job taking a neutral stance on this paper.

Max: instead of asking questions make statements. instead of inserting the full MLA citation into your essay try using parenthetical citations. I really like how you ended your essay and you back up everything with information. Really good job dude

Crystal: make you first paragraph more of an introduction of what you are going to talk about instead of jumping right in. trying breaking your essay into 4 paragraphs. intro, mothers role, fathers role, and conclusion. Your topic is really deep and you do a good job getting the reader involved by telling real life stories. Good job crystal!